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Innocence Is An Abstract Noun by ~mcr-whiskers:iconmcr-whiskers:



You found that minds can end abrupt
  and rhythms seem to cease
As beating hearts then pound quite sick
       you let pressure increase

At first you never stop to think
   as truth dies on your lips
    Until at last your heart returns
  to cry in crimson drips    


At one small glance your mighty touch
  might fall from guilt it seems
But once again your sportsmanship
    returns through all your dreams


Then all at once the force that hit
     your mind screams all its torment
  You never move through fatal steps
you won t forget a moment

As power lies through all their grief
  your body once enjoys it
    But voices never stop their screams
   your conscience never quiets

And soon you dive too deep to stop
       your fists clench cold in rage
Your hardened soul ends others breaths
   but you ll never leave your cage

You scream to stop as life goes on
   your mind will not let go
   It can t be stopped for just one lie
       escapes your ruined soul

"Just lie quite still" the doctors say
   you fill your heart with shame
For though you lost both arms and legs
       your mind will still play games
©2008-2009 ~mcr-whiskers
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Shut up I know Innocence is not a noun.....

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Actually, "innocence" is indeed an abstract noun...

But besides that, I find this to be quite a lovely poem. Beautiful, in my opinion. Honestly, I love your poetry.

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Life is just a series of rooms. The people you get stuck with in those rooms add up to your life.
:iconmcr-whiskers:
Thank you :)

My mother was all like "You think 'Innocence' is a noun?...." :blahblah:
And I was like "... Yes...?"
And then I got confused.... I feel stupid now.....

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Lol, Innocence IS a noun...
And...I can't make my own poetry. So I read your beautiful. Words. Like...Water over rocks. Or standing under a waterfall, something that crashes over your head.
I lack the ability to express myself, lol. I use too many words. And even then, I don't feel like I said what I wanted to say. So poetry isn't that great for me (to write).

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"Comedy is a man in trouble."
-Bill Erwin

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Oh yay, thanks :hug:
I don't know, you seem like the type to write good poetry but OKay... :)

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Und wenn ich nichtmehr kann Denke ich daran
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Nah, I just write story-ish things...
If I try to create poetry with any sort of rhythm, it starts to get crowded and the words knock together.

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"Comedy is a man in trouble."
-Bill Erwin

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Oh well, I guess my senses have failed me again...
:c :plug:

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Und wenn ich nichtmehr kann Denke ich daran
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Tragic and beautiful
The rhythm gives it a flowing quallity
You are truely a gifted writer

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.~' Devils never lie .~'
:iconmcr-whiskers:
Thank you, I love writing..
I hope to post something new soon but I never have the time!
(F:censored:ing school..)

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Und wenn ich nichtmehr kann Denke ich daran

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